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Approximately 29 minutes to read
Pixie has all she has ever wanted. She's young and in love with the man of her dreams. But when life takes an unexpected turn, what will she do?
Please help me reach my goal of 50 hearts.
Cover credit to Maddie Shiloh
almost 3 years ago Kennie said:
omg omg i love it i was the 50th person to like it!!!!!:)
over 3 years ago S.J. Bouquet said:
I saw you updated this! ARE YOU GOING TO WRITE MORE?! PLEASE!
about 4 years ago Lindsay Roberts said:
more please!! this is actually really good and i would love to reAD more!!! :)
over 4 years ago Taylor Cronin said:
Oh, I really loved this! I hope you add more! :)
over 4 years ago Abby. said:
You should work on the grammer that you screwed up, but other wise...ADD MORE TO THE STORY FOR THE SAKE OF ALL OF US PEOPLE OUT THERE THAT LOVE THIS BOOK. By you writting this story you inspired me to write my own fan-fic about One Direction.
over 4 years ago S.J. Bouquet said:
Work on those typo's but GOODNESS AWESOME STUFF HERE! ^_^
I don't know but I felt connected and yet not... like... I don't know... I wanted to cry with those two. You captured my attention. It just seems to be lacking in something.
You're telling it in first person from both of their points of view and at the same time it seems like there is only one narrator. They seem the same but they are completely different people. If it wasn't for the "Harry" and "Pixie" titles, I wouldn't know the difference between them.
I suggest you try to do a character sheet and really get to know those two. Get in their heads and see how they think separately. When you write, imagine yourself as that individual person. Your story will be soo much better if you figure out how to make their voices separate.
I wish you all the luck in the world! ^_^
As is though, the story is still very good.