Lewis and Clark: The Spanish Frontier

Lewis and Clark: The Spanish Frontier

1 chapter / 1199 words

Approximately 6 minutes to read

Description:

A lighthearted addition to the trapped contest. Inspired by a real Louis! The cover was made by Kary L. Anyway, thanks for reading, and please leave an honest heart/comment/review!

Comments(9)

I believe in her

almost 7 years ago Tate Thurgood (KONY 2012) said:

It's pretty good. I didn't exactly enjoy the cuss words, though. Maybe you could change them?

I believe in her

almost 7 years ago Tate Thurgood (KONY 2012) said:

I like it. A few errors, though, like switching from 3rd person to 1st person in the beginning.

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almost 7 years ago Zaphodora Beeblebrox said:

liked it, it's fun. I think just two people trapped was unique and a great idea. Rather than a group or an entire school/building. Love your characters, ashley is the perfect uptight responsible TA type. The description of his hair coming out of his hoodie like a ray of sunlight was really well done. The transition from first to third person is a bit odd but it serves to get across some of the disorientation of waking up.. so I'm undecided. I think the end could be less... dark tower collapsing and the orcs running away when the ring falls into mount doom... yeah, eloquent right? I think the resolution could be less idyllic that's all. :)

thanks for your comment on 'washed out' that was really nice of you.

Cutecookie

almost 7 years ago Rhina Matsuda said:

Nice! I like how you took the cliche story and gave it a new twist! The beginning and end were very lighthearted and cute. Good job! :)

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