Rain Must Fall

Rain Must Fall

9 chapters / 3108 words

Approximately 16 minutes to read

Description:

Inspired by the line in "Mirror Mirror": "Snow must do what snow does best, fall." I'm not sure if that's the actual line but it's similar to that:

Rain is the first born child and a disgrace to the royal family of Meliva. Her only escape from her parent's cruelty died long ago. Now she must save herself, before it is too late.

Genres:

Adventure, Fantasy, Drama

Comments(9)

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over 5 years ago Brianna Richards said:

I love how Rain and Henry's relationship. You're very good at setting the tone for this piece. I loved it!

~Brianna =3

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over 5 years ago Kate said:

This is an interesting piece. You have some grammar and punctuation errors, so definitely go back through each chapter and check for them. I think your story has an interesting plot, and you have clearly put a lot of thought into it. Good job!

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over 5 years ago Dylan Mabe said:

I have really been interested in medival times latley. This is great!

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over 5 years ago Alex M. Stache said:

I want to read more...

Reviews(2)

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over 5 years ago Alicia KC said:

The first thing I noticed were some errors: In the first paragraph where you say 'gave no recognition of the man' maybe you should change that to 'did not acknowledge the man', it runs a little smoother. “She took still” (took -> stood [?]) I’ll stop there… But you should really read through this once or twice. There are a number of grammar/spelling/word mistakes.

Otherwise, this story is really interesting! I was kind of sad to see there wasn't more, haha. It's a great beginning to what could be a very intense, crazy fairy tale xD Hopefully, you'll keep going with it! I want to see what happens! Great job~~ Keep writing :D

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over 5 years ago Arabia "Another Girl" Knight said:

This, I feel, must be made into a novel. It's fantastic! Please, tell me when you have more in store. Ok? That Rain is daring yet attractive. She is also as stubborn as a mule. And I wonder what that robed man was. Some parts are vague and could use a little touching up but it's amazing!