The Man Upstairs

The Man Upstairs

1 chapter / 1192 words

Approximately 6 minutes to read


*For the Stolen Contest! If you like it, heart it. Thank you! My goal is 160 hearts or more!* It's the final confrontation between two enemies, the end-all of all end-alls.

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over 4 years ago Linda Dionne said:

Wow, love the idea of the fate of mankind residing in a tiny apartment building.

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over 4 years ago Aviline said:

This is amazing. Your story was definitely chosen right from the homepage! Congrats!


over 4 years ago Allison Rose said:

That's kind of the impression I got too. I don't see G-d as a man, but I understood the theme of a battle between what's ultimate good versus what's ultimately evil. Very well-written, too. The imagery, down to each little description (most notably how the unnamed man lit his cigarette - very observant!) was great!


almost 5 years ago Sharon said:

Absolutely amazing! Great idea, and written with so much detail. I picked out exactly who was who. love it, and can't wait to read the rest. :D



over 5 years ago Jadzia Brandli said:

This is really quite interesting! I loved the idea and I loved where you went with it. You really go into detail with the descriptions and the setting and the mood, I liked it all a lot. Good job with that.

I don't do a good job at going into major detail, like you did with my piece 'Touch' so I can't give you any specific idea to improve this piece.

My only thought would be that the ending seems kind of quick and silly, I mean, with swords? Just my thought. But anyway, I did like it and I think your writing is beautiful and I really liked this idea.

This is a swap for 'Touch' because you read it and I didn't want to bug you about what piece you wanted me to read of yours. I know you're busy. But, if there is something else you wanted me to read, just let me know when you have the time and I will get around to reading that pieace. thanks for your comments on 'TOuch'!

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over 5 years ago August Promnitz said:

All-in-all, a very interesting story. God vs the Devil is the ULTIMATE good vs Evil fight, one well-portrayed by this story!