thats creepy.
I agree with shawnybear. This would be more improved if you added some more details.
I like the internal battle. you portrayed that well.
great job! Keep writing!
**Review**
This is absolutely amazing. Great descriptions and storylines. I found a couple of grammar mistakes but they didn't affect the story at all :) It was very emotional and intense, and I felt like I understood the characters, which is great. I love this and I wish you good luck in the comp, you deserve it! Great job! ^_^
Comments(19)
11 months ago Miley Dylan said:
this was so creepy, but so cool in a sad way!
12 months ago Arty Girl said:
Wow. This is ... deep. I love it. The demon is evil but so well portrayed.
about 1 year ago Christina Michelle said:
It is a bit too fast-paced, but since it's for a contest I understand. Good job otherwise! Good luck in the contest :)
about 1 year ago Megan Hepler said:
Oh wow this is really good. I like it and the idea you had going. Good job
Reviews(3)
12 months ago Review said:
thats creepy. I agree with shawnybear. This would be more improved if you added some more details. I like the internal battle. you portrayed that well. great job! Keep writing! **Review**
about 1 year ago Ashleigh Jayne said:
This is absolutely amazing. Great descriptions and storylines. I found a couple of grammar mistakes but they didn't affect the story at all :) It was very emotional and intense, and I felt like I understood the characters, which is great. I love this and I wish you good luck in the comp, you deserve it! Great job! ^_^