World War 666

World War 666

3 chapters / 13423 words

Approximately about 1 hour to read


For those of you who dislike extremely unlikely things, such as talking cats, stop here. Until I can come up with a more catchy summary, this is a story about a group of people and a talking cat trying to stop a world war.
Complete at Fifty Chapters. Editing in progress. Then uploading to Figment. I doubt I will ever have all fifty up. The first in a six-book series. Currently intermittently working on the second.



over 4 years ago Paperback Butterfly said:

Making a note here so I remember to come back, finish reading, and leave a proper review in the morning. I'm really enjoying this story. :)


over 5 years ago ShelbyLikesWriting said:

*the reader


over 5 years ago ShelbyLikesWriting said:

You descriptions are really vivid, leaving reading wanting to know what will happen next. I think the plot is very interesting and original, so props to you on that!

I think that if people took the time to read this, they would enjoy it as I did enjoy it. I do think though, that a lot of people would look at the plot and be like "Oh... THAT'S weird", but you made a weird topic interesting. :) haha.

Good job!

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over 5 years ago Zach Thomas said:

I heart this because you've won the award of "Most Generic Title EVER"



over 5 years ago Spandana Myneni said:

First of all, I'd like to say that I have a great big soft spot for talking cats and a strong voice. You've done a lot of things well here--I loved the details about the oranges and Claws's name.

Some narrative voices can add so much to a story--one of my favorite examples is "Jonathan Strange & Mr. Norrell". The style is very English and it adds a level of atmosphere and expectation to the book that I've rarely, if ever, seen otherwise. I think you have the opportunity here to make your voice do that for you. You've already made gestures in that direction with your opening (and the description of Whitechapel Drive). Because you've given me a taste, now I want the same level of culture (if that word makes sense) from every corner of this story. If you've seen A Clockwork Orange, you might get an idea of what I mean--they built a world with new rules, new language and new vices. That's what I want from this. What that means for you is some time spent thinking about the flavor of the world, and how you can manipulate your medium--the written word--to draw us into the world with you.

That was my very first thought reading this, and you must forgive me if it's a bit rambling and jumbled--I've just woken.

Another thing that jumped out at me is Lucifer's introduction. So much of it happens in Claws's mind, as exposition! You're writing a story with talking cats, man! Why doesn't he come in singing an opera? He's just a savage talking kitty now, but what if some of Skimbleshanks's insanity is catching? I really want him to be a big, fantastic character. Claws is carrying too much of the story and charm now, and I think with an ensemble like this, you can have them all share the limelight.

With the girl in the garden, I think you've got an opportunity here to play up the humor. Right now, you're framing everything as if she isn't interested. Why would she be asking after the story if she wasn't interested? What if she just nodded politely at Claws, or kept chirping at a bird or whatnot, but Claws was the one to take her disinterest as interest and keep talking on and on. Make the joke on Claws. That might just play better, funnier, than Claws remarking after every line of hers that she made an effort to seem interested.

All just ideas, take them or leave them. But I loved reading this, and I look forward to your future writings!


over 5 years ago M. Hebert said:

I really like this story. Having the main character/narrator be a cat was a nice touch, and you use humor well. I was a little confused by the end of paragraph 14; it took me a second read to figure out what you were talking about, so you might want to make that a little clearer. Also in the first paragraph, it might be a little clearer if you take the last part (seperated by a comma) of the sentence that starts "Light spilled..." and attach it to the next sentence. Does that make sense? Otherwise it's great, and you should continue.