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Approximately 22 minutes to read
cover done by Faraway Hana :D
over 4 years ago DreamingBigDreams said:
I love how you took fairytale characters and turned them into your own. It's new and refreshing idea xD
over 4 years ago trumpetgrl said:
I loved all of the fairytale characters and how you gave each one a personality beyond the story! Please write more!
over 4 years ago Celia Brown said:
Wow, Loved this Please write More!!
over 4 years ago Ashley Wiltsie said:
More! MORE! More! Pretty Please :)
over 1 year ago Alaria Farren said:
Wow, I read every chapter I could and was left desperate for more! Well done! I really like what you've done with this story line, and I can't wait for you to continue it. Please, please don't stop! It's so enjoyable seeing characters that we all know and love in a brand new setting. How refreshing!
As for a few things I noticed, I think a little more detail and description about the atmosphere would be incredibly helpful to you in this plot. You're incredibly good at keeping up with character imagery, but if you could paint a little more of what the room or place itself looks/feels/smells like that would make a huge difference in transporting your readers and helping them experience the same world you do every time you write!
Also, when you jumped from the past to the present, the time exchange was a bit confusing, and I couldn't exactly tell how many years had past and what sort of time period we were in (old age, modern, or medieval?).
Other than those few details, this story is good as gold, and I will be anticipating the arrival of the next chapter! Great job!
over 4 years ago Cathtasy said:
Oh, and I couldn't really tell which one was the seven year old. You may want to be a little more clear on that. :)