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Mothers are always honest, aren't they?
over 2 years ago Holly Hall said:
Beautifully written poem and great imagery! I thoroughly enjoyed reading this! I especially loved the ending about how the rhododendrons still slept even after the ice had melted away. The last lines were just really powerful to me. Great job!
over 3 years ago Kayy said:
This was beautifully written and I thought it flowed perfectly. I really enjoyed reading this. Great job!
about 4 years ago Olivia Wilding said:
Amazing. Thank you for sharing this.
over 4 years ago Cedric David Panther said:
This is very nice! I don't quite get it, probably because I am not familiar to the southern region and I have no idea what a Rhodendurun(however it's spelled), but, I liked it. It has this strangeness to it that I find attractive.
I think making it rhyme is a poor suggestion, though. A poem can flow without rhymes. Just keep it the way it is.
over 5 years ago lynne silver said:
ah, i really don't think you should make it rhyme.
i really enjoy this poem, how it hints at a larger picture, but doesn't go into detail. i also like that it evoke new orleans, and gets into the setting more than most poetry.
i'm new here, if you'd consider reading/reviewing some of my work it'd be great, you seem like you really know what you're doing.
over 5 years ago Joshua "LF" Mitchell said:
I mostly agree with Ihana. Also, if you can manage, I believe this poem could be really good if you could make it rhyme! You might consider trying it....
However, I did enjoy the poem, the story was interesting, and was just very well done. The way you told the story made it flow really well. Great job!