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Mothers are always honest, aren't they?
11 months ago Kayy said:
This was beautifully written and I thought it flowed perfectly. I really enjoyed reading this. Great job!
over 1 year ago K. Qua said:
Amazing. Thank you for sharing this.
almost 2 years ago Cedric David Panther said:
This is very nice! I don't quite get it, probably because I am not familiar to the southern region and I have no idea what a Rhodendurun(however it's spelled), but, I liked it. It has this strangeness to it that I find attractive.
I think making it rhyme is a poor suggestion, though. A poem can flow without rhymes. Just keep it the way it is.
over 2 years ago The Drew Sisters said:
Wow. So nice when you're surfing figment and come across amazing pieces like this. :)
over 2 years ago mia shackelford said:
ah, i really don't think you should make it rhyme.
i really enjoy this poem, how it hints at a larger picture, but doesn't go into detail. i also like that it evoke new orleans, and gets into the setting more than most poetry.
i'm new here, if you'd consider reading/reviewing some of my work it'd be great, you seem like you really know what you're doing.
almost 3 years ago Joshua "LF" Mitchell said:
I mostly agree with Ihana. Also, if you can manage, I believe this poem could be really good if you could make it rhyme! You might consider trying it....
However, I did enjoy the poem, the story was interesting, and was just very well done. The way you told the story made it flow really well. Great job!