Aera Thaln

Aera Thaln

3 chapters / 8109 words

Approximately 41 minutes to read

Description:

Two parallel worlds, one of magic and one of science. When a research team tries to combine the resources of both worlds to create a unique solution to an incurable disease, their experiments backfire and a war erupts in Aera Thaln between humans and dragons. A suicidal girl with Social Anxiety Disorder named Nina travels from Earth to Aera Thaln in her dreams, but it's only until she experiences Aera Thaln in real life that she begins to understand the role that even someone like her can play in such a grand conflict.

Comments(8)

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almost 5 years ago Briana Colfer said:

Read the prologue and chapter one. Loved the idea of a world trying to combine magic with science. A lot of interesting possible plot points there. The Prologue really drew my attention in to the story. Good work!

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almost 5 years ago Si Jia said:

SWAP: Chapter 1

I love it so much! I really enjoyed the plot and it was pretty creative. I didn't see many grammatical issues. Nice tone, style, and diction. Great job and keep it up!

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over 5 years ago Lilo Chebli said:

I read the prologue and well this is very interesting. I did enjoy this piece, because very few people emphasize on the importance of both fantasy and science. The first paragraph or two was somewhat confusing, but i got the picture in the end. all-in-all great job!

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over 5 years ago Destiny Mangini said:

I'm just going to get right to it- First chapter: "Hell I'm surprised" should be "Hell, I'm surprised" with a comma.

That's the only mistake I saw.

The pace at the party is a bit too fast for my liking, and I feel as though you did a lot of telling instead of showing.

I'm a tad confused. What is this story about? I don't see any kind of plot at all. :S Maybe I'm missing something?

Reviews(5)

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almost 5 years ago M.H. said:

I thought I was only going to read the prologue, but found time for the first chapter as well. This was very well-written! I love the way you've left us wondering exactly what's going on, but still given us a picture of what's happening. Great work with that. ^^ I did have some questions, though. How old is Nina? And what about Ellen? It's tough to tell, and affects the way I picture them. Also, why would Ellen be so friendly to people who "screw her over?" That's an odd attitude to take, and something significant has to happen to someone for them to have such an outlook, if you ask me. Other than that, though, I loved this, and can't wait to come back for more. :)

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almost 5 years ago Justin (SparkFire) Bretz said:

I had enough time to read the prologue, which was quite impressive. :)

You have a good way of describing what is happening from one moment to the next. The first two lines were kind of shocking, I was sitting here thinking, "Random dragon is awesome." XD

You have a really good story here, and it kind of makes me think of an anime type show written into a literature form. Your cover might have added to the effect, but I don't think you should change that. It's really good the way it is. It even brought a bit of Watchmen to mind, which was actually one of the greatest graphic novels. :D