For the Love of a Girl

For the Love of a Girl

1 chapter / 1075 words

Approximately 5 minutes to read


*please heart & comment for the Justine Mag Contest! * This is my retelling of the greek myth of Eurydice.



over 5 years ago Azondrielle Kat said:

This is great! I love the touches of despair that lurk throughout the whole story! I love your characters and your dialogue, although the beginning was a bit choppy. Overall, nice job and good luck in the contest!

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over 5 years ago Miranda H said:

The line about "The Underworld of Hollywood" made me laugh :) This was a very interesting concept, and I'm always a sucker for mythology. The writing felt a bit stilted and I wasn't sure whether you wanted to use a modern voice or a voice that fitted the mythology aspect. That, of course, is only my opinion and can be taken or left as you see fit. Great job, and good luck in the contest!


over 5 years ago Carolina Garza said:

Love this! I love mythology and this was a great interpretation. Best of luck in the contest!


over 5 years ago A Girl That Writes said:

this is really beautiful! good luck in the contest!



over 5 years ago arachnidsGrip said:

Another person who loves the Classics! I'm not alone! This was really impressive. You had me hoping, as I always do when I read this story, that maybe it'll be different this time. Maybe they'll make it this time. This was beautiful. Keep writing!


over 5 years ago HT Fallen said:

Return for Distance:

Here are just a couple of things that I picked up on as I read. Feel free to use or disregard as you see fit.

"I know[] I signed a contract..." I feel like this would be better without the comma. As it is, it's very choppy, and though the comma could technically be there, I think it reads smoother when it isn't.

Watch out for comma splices. "I love him, [and] I want to be with him."

H. Ades? Nice. :)

"In on Orpheu[s]" You have a typo

Yikes, that's harsh, H.Ades. You did a great job with this, though. Sometimes, the writing feels a little bit stiff, but sometimes that's just the way it works out better. Keep up the good work!