For the Love of a Girl

For the Love of a Girl

1 chapter / 1075 words

Approximately 5 minutes to read

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*please heart & comment for the Justine Mag Contest! * This is my retelling of the greek myth of Eurydice.

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over 5 years ago Adrienne Sara said:

*Swap* Wow. This is amazing. It is s ton better then my entry for this contest :) Good luck!!!!

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over 5 years ago Isabel Filippone said:

I loved that you used Greek mythology such a good idea I am a big fan of Greek mythology

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over 5 years ago arachnidsGrip said:

Another person who loves the Classics! I'm not alone! This was really impressive. You had me hoping, as I always do when I read this story, that maybe it'll be different this time. Maybe they'll make it this time. This was beautiful. Keep writing!

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over 5 years ago HT Fallen said:

Return for Distance:

Here are just a couple of things that I picked up on as I read. Feel free to use or disregard as you see fit.

"I know[] I signed a contract..." I feel like this would be better without the comma. As it is, it's very choppy, and though the comma could technically be there, I think it reads smoother when it isn't.

Watch out for comma splices. "I love him, [and] I want to be with him."

H. Ades? Nice. :)

"In on Orpheu[s]" You have a typo

Yikes, that's harsh, H.Ades. You did a great job with this, though. Sometimes, the writing feels a little bit stiff, but sometimes that's just the way it works out better. Keep up the good work!