More Than Miles

More Than Miles

18 chapters / 4015 words

Approximately 20 minutes to read


Thank you to the amazing S. J. Bouquet for the awesome cover!
Charlie Gilbert wants people to hear his music. When he finally gets his chance at fame, he doesn't realize just how hard it will be for him to keep his head out of the clouds and his feet on the ground. Charlie starts to forget everything that made him who he is. Liz Faith, the girl Charlie has loved ever since kindergarten, becomes close with Charlie, showing him that she respected his music, but didn't completely agree with who he had become. Will Charlie change for the girl he loves? Or will he leave her, and everything else in his life, behind for the fame and fortune?

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Hey everyone! Just in case you were wondering, here is the soundtrack I have so far for "More Than Miles"!

1. More Than Miles by Brantley Gilbert
2. Take a Back Road by Rodney Atkins
3. Good Directions by Billy Currington
4. Tattoos on This Town by Jason Aldean
5. All Your Life by The Band Perry
6. What Hurts the Most by Rascal Flatts
7. Crazy Town by Jason Aldean
8. Drunk On You by Luke Bryan
9. Put You In A Song by Keith Urban (Thank you soooo much C. R. Chamberlain for mentioning this song to me!)
10. Barefoot Blue Jean Night by Jake Owen
11. Keep the Girl by Jason Aldean
12. The Trouble with Girls by Scotty McCreery
13. I Love You This Big by Scotty McCreery
14. Crazy Girl by Eli Young Band
15. Honey Bee by Blake Shelton
16. You Don't Know Her Like I Do by Brantley Gilbert
17. Suds in the Bucket by Sara Evans
18. I Don't Want This Night to End by Luke Bryan
19. The House That Built Me by Miranda Lambert
20. A Woman Like You by Lee Brice


Writing, Romance
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over 3 years ago Jo said:

I agree with the past comment. Do continue!


over 4 years ago Anna Brier said:

I loved your story! Could you PLEASE continue it sometime? I would love to see what happens next. :)


almost 5 years ago ♥R.J.Craig♥ said:

that was great!

Photo on 2012-10-11 at 17.52

almost 5 years ago heart said:

I like it you should finish it



almost 5 years ago S.J. Bouquet said:

I loved this! :D I read the first chapter completely through this time ;) You moved fast and got to the point. That's both good and bad. Something didn't sit right with me... I feel like you could cut out a bit of the dialogue and just replace it with more sensory details. This story is interesting and I want to see where it goes ^_^ just add more SENSORY details. It engages a reader and holds their interests. I think another thing that didn't feel right was that Charlie get's the offer to go to the recording label so quickly in the story. The reader doesn't get time to soak in the fact that Charlie might be dreaming of recording one day. They don't have time to see him struggle and route for him.

As for Liz... I think you've paced the interaction with her phenomenally ^_^ Can't wait to see more of that angle of the story ;) Just slow down with the recording label. Have Charlie express his dream more. Make the reader feel the guitar callouses on his fingers from how much he's played.


about 5 years ago S.J. Bouquet said:

critique: your first paragraph is a little rough. Try reading it out loud and if you stumble, fix the words. I think the part where he says he's going to be sitting on a curb playing guitar was good :D It tells us who he is and what this story is. Another thing: work on showing and not telling. Use sensory details :D