Fire

Fire

6 chapters / 15470 words

Approximately about 1 hour to read

Description:

Mirra Gianocci is just the the typical teenage immigrant.

It's 1908 and 16 year old Mirra has just arrived in the United States with her Italian family. She finds a job to help support her family at the Triangle Shirtwaist Factory. It doesn't pay much, but she'll get more then money; she'll find fire there, in all forms. The fire of friendship, the fire of love, the fire of standing up for something you feel strongly about, and the fire that involves a burning flame.

NOTE: I'm having the Italian parts edited it for me. When I first wrote the story, I was stuck using Google translate-my apologies for everything that's incorrect!

Comments(36)

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over 5 years ago Baffy Pie Crust said:

This is very good. I didn't read it all, but I will continue.

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almost 6 years ago Daniel Luo said:

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almost 6 years ago The Great Toepick said:

Please, publish the next chappie!!!!

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almost 6 years ago The Great Toepick said:

Ah!!!! You have to finish it!!!

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almost 6 years ago The Great Toepick said:

Great!! It reminds me of the book "Uprising". It's really good!!! (But you need the factory to catch on fire :D) I definitely do NOT read italian, and I think you need to remember we are kind of depending on you for it to make sense to us. :D Great work!! (And keep it up!)

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over 6 years ago Casie Dennell said:

First of all, what a great historical event to base your novel around. Well... not great. Obviously. But you know what I mean. Just seeing "Triangle Shirtwaist Factory" made me want to read the story.

The prologue definitely sets up your story in an interesting way - HUGE SPOILER, obviously, but I think getting to peek at what's to come always gives the rest of the story more meaning. It's also a great way to grab the reader's attention - you got mine, anyway.

I like that you actually use Italian dialogue as well - it can get a little confusing at times, so you might want to work at clarifying what's being said a little more, and maybe switch to English for some of the more complicated sentences. I hope you're able to keep most of it in, though. It makes the whole story seem really authentic. :]