Full Moon Magic

Full Moon Magic

15 chapters / 41749 words

Approximately about 3 hours to read

Description:

A FANTASY NOVEL in the works! **Very Rough Draft** I am shy about my work, so it is very rare that I post as I write. PLEASE excuse typos and errors... this is my original, un-proof-read work, which I post to figment as I write. :) This is my current project. :)
© 2012 All Rights Reserved. No part of this book may be reproduced in any form or by any electronic or mechanical means including storage and retrieval systems without permission in writing from Christy Penman.

(yes, this is 'City Lights...' I renamed it 'Full Moon Magic.' :)

Genres:

Adventure, Fantasy, Novel

Comments(15)

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over 4 years ago zoe said:

I really like how at the begining you changed something from normal to amazing with your word choice!

Piano

over 4 years ago Lela Sain said:

I read up to chapter four. Not into fantasy Hary Poter type. However, Its a good write.

Goth angel

over 4 years ago Ash Night13 said:

This is a great story! :)

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over 4 years ago Euphemia "Effie" Blythe said:

I know I am just finding this story, but I really like this. I only had time to read to Chapter 4 but I'll be back. This is a fantastic piece! I wouldn't mind if you read my story of "And It Begins" or "Finding Fairies" and give me your feedback Thanks!

Reviews(1)

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over 5 years ago Krystal Fragoso said:

To tell you the truth, I don't really like books like this, but your story was a nice read. I like how you create your own world instead of just making it in the real world. I have a few things that you can change, but it's up to you. I'm not trying to be mean or anything, so please don't take it the wrong way. First off, in your summary you spelled family wrong. Just change that in the summary. I think you might want to add more to the prologue since it's supposed to tell what happened before the story. Maybe tell about how she ran away, but it's up to you. What you have is good. I felt that chapter one was like the prologue. Your first sentence in chapter one: "It was a brisk, cold winter morning, in the final day of January..." To me, I didn't think that the comma after morning should have been there, but I'm not the best at grammar. I don't think you needed the three dots after "I spoke clearly and sharply into the voice recognition electronics..." Change the three dots into a comma so it is "I spoke clearly and sharply into the voice recognition electronics, "First floor."" In chapter one when you wrote 'intentely' I think you meant intently. Check the spelling on that. "My right hand was sending shooting needles or agonizing pain through my aching body..." I think you meant to say "My right hand was sending shooting needles of agonizing pain through my aching body..." When doctor Timothy is talking to her (at least I think he is) you put Mrs. Merrison. I think it should be Ms. since she isn't married. To me, I thought you needed more emotion. Sorry for this long review. Other than those things it was very good. You described everything well, and I think this piece will go far. Great job, and I love the concept about this.