Coup de Foudre - Love at First Sight

Coup de Foudre - Love at First Sight

10 chapters / 18350 words

Approximately about 2 hours to read


Caitlyn Major is your average Sophomore girl in High School. That is until she sees Aaron Hamilton and falls in love. Star lacrosse player, gorgeous blue eyes, perfect light brown hair. Then Caitlyn finds out devastating news and is tormented by a decision to leave everything behind or stay with Aaron.
*Cover Design by Grace Klage


Writing, Romance, Drama



about 5 years ago Nolan Gross said:

This is a beautiful piece of writing! It's really good what you have. I liked it a lot! great work!


about 5 years ago CharChar said:

I read the first 2 chapters so far. I really like that you have a prologue, that hooked me in. I also like that you get the story from more than one perspective.


about 5 years ago Adrianna M said:

You have a nice fluid style of writing, but be careful of doing too much 'telling' instead of 'showing'. The topic was a bit cliche for me, but i only read the first couple chapters. I love how you switch between POVs, it makes it a bit different. Keep it up :)


about 5 years ago Olivia Evans said:

I actually really liked this! Awesome job!



over 5 years ago Mojodaisy47 said:

This is in return for our swap!(I only read chapter 1)

Ok I thought this was a good start to a novel. I think you should add a lot more detail instead of just telling the reader what is going on. I was also very confused at some times. You had many run on sentences and used words like "and" and "but" many times. I think you should reread it out loud to work out the kinks in the sentences.

Overall I think it has a lot of potential to be great! :)

Keep writing!