Supernatural Summer

Supernatural Summer

2 chapters / 519 words

Approximately 3 minutes to read

Description:

©2012 Summer Reading Contest Finalist! Aria has to spend the summer at her grandma's, but a horrible memory on a summer night ruins it all...

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Comments(266)

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over 5 years ago Olivia Rumour said:

Very creepy, well done! As a few others have said, somewhat unrealistic dialogue, but otherwise good. Good luck! :)

~Rumour

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over 5 years ago Hervidor the Hamburger said:

Good job!! My only criticism is that your dialogue was not very realistic. It was okay, but not as realistic as the rest of the story felt. The rolling stones grandma comment felt real, but her "Come back!" comment didn't. IT WAS GREAT. Just look over your dialogue again if your looking for any ways to improve it.

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over 5 years ago Scribbles said:

Wow, this is amazing! You're a talented writer. Keep it up!

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over 5 years ago Sadie Collins said:

very good, excellent writing!

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over 3 years ago Linn Pena said:

This was wonderful with an unexpected ending to it. I loved the uniqueness of your story. ^_^

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over 5 years ago Emi said:

This reminds me a bit of what happened with a character called 'Red' in the tv show 'Once Upon A Time'. It was well written and I loved the ending, but the dialogue between the girl and her grandmother at the beginning was a little rushed. Also, I felt like you could have foreshadowed what was about to happen by going into more detail about the Incident. Overall a nice eerie story; I can imagine it being told around a campfire. Keep writing!