Supernatural Summer

Supernatural Summer

2 chapters / 519 words

Approximately 3 minutes to read


©2012 Summer Reading Contest Finalist! Aria has to spend the summer at her grandma's, but a horrible memory on a summer night ruins it all...

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over 5 years ago camryn rae said:

I loved it. very devil wears Prada but with something new to the mix.


over 5 years ago B.Brown said:

You have a good start, and your concept isn't bad. I don't know if there was a word count, but you might want to add more description (for instance "astounding Manhattan view" could have a lot more description), and also, I don't know what effect you were going for, but you might want to make it a little more realistic. Overall this has potential, and with a little work, you could turn this into something great! Good luck!


over 5 years ago Gabby said:

This is very entertaining.I like the way Mrs. Decker changed her attitude with Nigel.At first I thought that he was her boss, then you said that he was hot.Great job! :)


over 5 years ago Doodlebug said:

I like it allot but I feel that it could of gone on longer



over 3 years ago Linn Pena said:

This was wonderful with an unexpected ending to it. I loved the uniqueness of your story. ^_^

over 5 years ago Emi said:

This reminds me a bit of what happened with a character called 'Red' in the tv show 'Once Upon A Time'. It was well written and I loved the ending, but the dialogue between the girl and her grandmother at the beginning was a little rushed. Also, I felt like you could have foreshadowed what was about to happen by going into more detail about the Incident. Overall a nice eerie story; I can imagine it being told around a campfire. Keep writing!