Tainted Mystery

Tainted Mystery

1 chapter / 557 words

Approximately 3 minutes to read

Description:

You never know when you'll take your last breath. For the Summer Reading Contest. *Goal 200 hearts* (Do I hear 250? ;D)

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over 5 years ago Hailey Perry said:

this was really great! I loved the suspense & the mystery. Good job!

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over 5 years ago Amanda Margaret said:

This was very nicely done !! Really enjoyed this. Best of luck in the contest. wanna swap and read my story Daddy for the Forsaken Contest? :)

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over 5 years ago C.A.S said:

Shivers! Nicely done. The only critique I would have is to rephrase some of your sentences.

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over 5 years ago Hadiyah Stephens said:

Wow! This story is chilling. Your first sentence is perfect; it draws the reader in immediately and doesn't let them go. Amazing descriptions. Good luck in the contest. =)

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over 5 years ago Sadie Collins said:

The cover seemed a little boring, but overall, it was great! I'm glad someone made a vampire who was truly evil and not just 'misunderstood'. There simply aren't enough Draculas in the world. It was sad when he killed her family, especially when he killed her little sister last. But it did add to the atmosphere of despair ^^ God job!-------for a swap

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over 5 years ago Katie Gontier <3 said:

For the swap ************ I loved this! The title *Tainted Mystery* is just a title that makes one want to read this. The cover, doesn't really play along with the story, and it seemed a little boring. **************************************************** The first few sentences said that this was a well described story, and that it was going to get better as it went on. ******************************************************** The way *He* killed her family was horrible, but it made the story captivating. Expecially her little 9 year old sister. It seemed like she really loved the 9 year old. ********************************************* I didn't really get when she said that she was falling when *He* came into her room. ************************ The ending was just amazing, and it made me curious of what your personality is like, and it made me curious that if you ever decided to continue with this, of what you would come up with. ************* I really enjoyed reading this, and if you ever decide to continue it, I would love for you to let me know.