The Gargoyle Girl

The Gargoyle Girl

6 chapters / 4000 words

Approximately 20 minutes to read


“Who are you?” he asked her.
Her eyes widened at the sound of his voice and her pointed ears flattened closer to her head. A brilliant, red rose tumbled from her hair and landed near his feet.



over 4 years ago Rosetta Simon said:

I love this! It was so captivating and wellwritten. I thought Rose was an interesting character and I really felt sorry for her. From the very beginning, I was enthralled by this place she lived in and the way she left roses for Medusa. Your descriptions are great and I love the plot; even though it made me a little bit sad, I think the way you ended it is perfect. Keep up the great work!


over 4 years ago Emma Miriam said:

OH MY GOSH LAINA! OK, I'm literally bouncing up and down in my chair right now. This is the most clever, creative, original idea EVER! I love everything about this. The descriptions are amazing, and I absolutely love how you wove in the Perseus-Medusa myth. And the way you ended it...Perseus didn't tell her, she'll never know...oh, it's so sad but so PERFECT! Just PERFECT!

OK, I've calmed down now. Carry on. But, just saying, I think this is my favorite short story of yours. :)

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over 4 years ago F. E. Bloem said:

This story is so beautiful, and I think the sad ending only adds to that beauty. I can honestly say I was TOTALLY not expecting you to use the Greek Myth in there; very well placed - I was completely surprised, and even more enthralled. Man oh man, I can't express how much I love this. I think it's safe to say I have never loved a short story more; very well done! The Lord has blessed you with such amazing creativity and a wonderful writing style; great job!


over 4 years ago Cassie Rose said:

Oh, I forgot to put my suggestion! Okay, I noticed (especially toward the beginning) that the sentences were very staccato. I think it was a pairing of short sentences and also having the sentences be of pretty much the same structure. So, I would suggest maybe morphing sentences together, and then trying to switch up the sentence structures. That's it! Great read! :)



over 4 years ago Linda Dionne said:

This was such a lovely, perfectly crafted story. I loved the haunting tone that runs throughout the entire thing and especially the Greek myth connection. Beautiful, just beautiful. The beginning is lovely. We start with just her and the flower and then zoom out to include the entire, strange scene. I liked just the idea of this mysterious, wonderful girl, all alone in the castle, with nobody but the statues, waiting for Medusa to return. I think that it was just long enough. It wasn't dragged out or rushed. You unfolded details precisely. You gave us enough to want more but not too much. We still don't know everything until the very end of the story. The backstory was beautiful too, with her whole flock being turned to stone and Medusa slain by Perseus. The ending was very sad, but beautifully so. She will wait for an eternity. The whole story held me captive until the end. Wonderful job.

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over 5 years ago Anna M. Watson said:


Well, I don't know the myth, so I think that might have taken away from the full effect of the story. However, I loved it for what I understood. Your descriptions are amazing. I feel as if I can smell and taste them! Rose was a very interesting character with a lot of layers to her, and I'm sure there's a lot more to her that even the story didn't reveal. I also like Perseus and Pegasus. The end made me sad, but I'm a sucker for happy endings, and this one wasn't. I think you ended it wonderfully, as it really brought about emotion in the reader (me). Also, I loved the chapter titles. That's pretty much it I think...oh, except you used "course" instead of "coarse" in I believe chapter 2 or 3. That is all. Amazing job on this!

-Anna :)