3 chapters / 1200 words

Approximately 6 minutes to read


This is for the Semi-Charmed Life Contest, yep, but I'm really tired of heart based contests; they're so exhausting! So, heart it or not, it's up to you but, please, only if you like it! This is purely for FUN, since I like the prompt, I don't care if I win the contest or not, honestly! But good luck to everyone else who is in it!
Copyright © 2012 by Ciera Burch


Writing, Short Story



over 5 years ago Karyn Jade Leigh said:

How does this NOT have more hearts?! It was perfect! Incredible! Astounding! It deserved to place in the Semi-Charmed contest (I read most entries in the top 15- this is really good compared to some). I wish I could have given you some of my hearts (an excess of 300 for this contest, lol). I loved this! Great job! ♥


over 5 years ago Lydia said:

Mm. Beautiful.

I loved the intense amount of detail you put into your work; it was so evocative and tactile and wonderful to read. The first chapter's emotional depth, with the burning crib, was very powerful. I enjoyed the sense of confusion and lack of control from Hestia. This deserves to win (even if the contest is over already).

Well done! I look forward to more of your writings.


over 5 years ago Katie ZaBAM said:

Wow...the detail and description you put into this word is simply breathtaking. I love that I can picture everything! And I especially love your interpretation of the contest prompt, creating Hestia as a freak/outcast. I don't see any major issues with this piece, other than the fact that in the last couple of paragraphs, you suddenly switch from past to present tense - just remember, consistency is key! Overall, though, brilliant work. This piece deserves a LOT more exposure. :) Good luck in the contest!

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over 5 years ago Rachael Cronin said:

I loved this story! It was sad, but I totally understood what you meant with the flames. Keep up the great work and good luck!



over 5 years ago Abby Broadbent said:

this is pretty good. I liked it better than some other entries. I would have appreciated a little more. this looks like a measly page, no? I have no idea what you're capable of, but please elaborate. it was cool to feel all that fear, and paranoia (if it was there). I was a little confused, though. What thing did Hestia do? you didn't clarify if this was fantasy or back in time. Did she set the house on fire or does she control the fire? love to know more!