2 chapters / 13621 words

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I have been told that in the past, fifteen marked only just a birthday, signaling the birth of the child that had been born fifteen years previous. In the past, humans had it all, they saw, smelled, touched, tasted, and heard all. Things were beautiful; things were enjoyed with much more pleasure and to the fullest extent. Man and Women could view all things enchanting and fascinating. We could sense the seasons; the smell of blossoming wildflowers and roses in the fresh days of spring, the dry scorching blaze of the never ending summers. In the past, we could all at once sense colors and the sound and taste of the crunching red, yellow, and orange leaves in the fall that would spiral in whirlwinds along the roads exerting a crisp euphoric atmosphere. In the past, we could feel winters bitter and snowstorms raging.

We could until the very day it was taken away and the past ended with a deafening clash. The skies were at war, the very earth shaking. That’s how it all started: with a definite boom, whips of mist accompanying a symphony of loud claps. All of a sudden, the world was split into five categories: sights, sound, smell, touch, and taste.

Welcome to my world, the world of a new age.




about 4 years ago Delete said:

Wow has it been so long since you last updated???? Please don't stop continue


over 5 years ago Abbey said:

Oh my gosh! This is amazing! I absolutely love the idea for this story, and please please PLEASE write more! You imagery when describing the human's senses was outstanding, and the conclusion of the prologue was so chilling and left me begging for more! Great job!


over 5 years ago Morgan Beckner said:

This is so interesting and cool so far!

:) It's well written and I'd like to see this continue.

Great job!!


over 5 years ago paperprincess<3 said:

This is an interesting idea. I'd love to see where you go with it. You gave excellent descriptions of the seasons. That last line sounded a little awkward, although I like what you were trying to say. Maybe you should play around with the phrase to see if there's a better way of putting it. Looks like you're off to a good start1 Keep up the good work! ~Jess :)



over 5 years ago Lana Litovsk said:

Meredith's right - it really is suspenseful. So. Courtney. This has changed since I last read it. I like it. Except you should post more. Because Naomi is awesome!!! Okay, now I'll actually review. The two things I saw: first is that in the first sentence, you say "only just." pick one or the other, but using both is redundant. Second, i (and everyone else, im sure) want to know why the world was split into five. Maybe you could say somehting else about that. If you don't know, just say no-one knows!!! Overall, its amazing, and i cant wait for you to put up more!!! Love, Bri :D