Don't Count Me Out Yet

Don't Count Me Out Yet

1 chapter / 1190 words

Approximately 6 minutes to read

Description:

Violet Lampton, born and bred on the east coast moves to Westside L.A. with her mother to run away from her dark past.
If I can get one hundred "hearts" I will add more chapters!
Enjoy!

Genres:

Writing, Comedy, Romance

Comments(8)

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over 5 years ago Alicia L. said:

that was really well written, and the main character seems very real! great job!

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over 5 years ago Laina O'Shields said:

Haha i loved that :) Perfectly written, you had the dialogue all right, which is always a plus, i hate having to try to explain how dialogue works to people. I loved the detail and description in here, you totally built a character and i liked her a lot by the time i finished reading! Amazingly done! (love the cover too btw!)

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over 5 years ago Carmen Lopez said:

Wow! Good job Haley! Keep on writing girl! I really enjoyed this story a lot! :-)

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over 5 years ago Jessica Carters said:

LOL! This made me laugh so much! What drew me in was your cover page, it's so well done. Keep writing, I want to read more. :)

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over 5 years ago Linda D said:

I love this girl’s sarcasm, she is complaining without whining. And she truly loves her mum, which is refreshing to see. A few things I noticed: Blonde – is how I always spelled it – I think - with my nemesis (spell check) always changing it according to his American spelling, I am not sure anymore which way it is spelled. Beach take-over Hyphen between take and over. And then a jeep (full of) daisy-duke…girls (because you have girl(s) in the plural. Beach-volleyball players - gives us more of an impression of what they are wearing – bikini type wear (and with the hyphen doesn’t change the word count). This is a very witty piece, and I love your tongue-in-cheek poke at the stereotypical California girl. Good luck in the contest, and I hope you do continue afterwards.