Love On The Other Side Of The Rainbow

Love On The Other Side Of The Rainbow

24 chapters / 57549 words

Approximately about 5 hours to read

Description:

*Completed on 9/16/2013 at 1:45 pm*
His whole life, Curtis Strickland never thought about his love life. When his senior year roles around, he starts developing a crush on another boy named Dave. As the year goes on, Curtis is trying to get used to the idea of him being gay. Curtis struggles with the idea whether or not to tell Dave about his feelings. When two classmates in the senior class die, Curtis starts to consider telling Dave because he realizes life is too short to hide his feelings.
(Based on my personal experience of being gay and falling in love with my straight friend)

Genres:

Writing, Drama, Novel

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almost 2 years ago vestsherry said:

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over 4 years ago Eric Forgue said:

Chapter 23 Posted! Only One more chapter to go! :D

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over 4 years ago Eric Forgue said:

Chapter 22 was just posted! Only two more chapters to write! :D Almost Done! :D

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over 4 years ago Eric Forgue said:

Sorry Y'all! I ended up in the hospital again! Blah! I promise you I will not leave this story unfinished!

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over 4 years ago E.S. Paris said:

I am definitely going to continue reading this. I love the messages behind it. Problems with humanity, judging, stereotypes, love, acceptance...I could go really deep into this. My brain has been permanently English-classed. Can I use that as a verb?

Anyway, some of the sentences could use a bit of work. Sometimes you jump from idea to idea and you have to read it a few times so it makes sense. That happens to me all the time, it's nothing that some good rereading won't fix. Also, there was a bit of repetition of words. (Like how I used of twice in that sentence...not intentional) Having a thesaurus next to you or using an online one does wonders for word choice. Using more words helps writing flow better.

It's a really great story so far and I can't wait to finish reading the rest of it. You keep writing, and editing, and rewriting, and reading until you know it's perfect--or until your brain explodes--and I know that this will be truly amazing.

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about 5 years ago littlewizard said:

I'm not all the way through yet but so far I really like this story. It has a great concept and it is interesting to read.

There are a few things, though. It is very repetitive. I know that it is meant to be like that to some degree because the feelings return everyday, but you should change it up and go a bit deeper into what you're feeling, not just saying feelings.

Also the sentences could be condensed. You say the same things a few different ways in each paragraph and it could all be in the same sentence. Like the allergy medicine paragraph in chapter 10, it repeats the same thing over and over and could be condensed to one or two sentences. Another one is the garage code part. It could be condensed to "My brain was so fried that it took me a second to recall the code to my garage." and then just move onto the next paragraph, you can leave out the entering the garage and house part, that can be inferred.

I like it a lot. This story is so interesting and I am about to go finish it right now, I can't wait to see how it all turns out, what I suggest is just reading back through and polishing it up and condensing what you can.