Waiting to die

Waiting to die

1 chapter / 358 words

Approximately 2 minutes to read

Genres:

Drama, Short Story

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Comments(14)

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about 5 years ago Kira Martin said:

This is so sad... The way you set them up enough to care when they die... :'[

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about 5 years ago A.A. AL-Bark said:

I saw a few grammar problems but other then that it was a good read!

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about 5 years ago Elaine Harlington said:

Only error I saw was "I miss my mother." Other than that this story was so sad and tragic. I love the ending because it really helps pull the story together. Good luck!

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about 5 years ago Sally Balboa said:

this was really sad. my only critiue is that the only time i heard different accents is when they say 'me'. andthis happens about 5 times, and when it does it throws me off because the rest of the time it doesnt have an accent. otherwise i liked it.

Reviews(4)

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over 1 year ago Kayla Margaret said:

Don’t Forget to Indent when Starting with Dialogue. Instead of “Me and Ciaran were starving.” Do; “Ciaran and I were starving I don’t have much more to say other than this is a heart breaking story!

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almost 5 years ago Ariah Brown said:

I love the emotion and the slight feeling of hopelessness. There were some grammar errors, but I'm not sure if those were intentional. But the description was great. It would've been great to more into how they felt dead already to emphasize that sense of giving up. But altogether a great story!