I Come Alive

I Come Alive

1 chapter / 2134 words

Approximately 11 minutes to read


© 2012
Not sure how to explain this, but I worked hard on it and I am pretty darn pleased with the end result. This is my first time writing in this style of writing, so it's not perfect but yeah. This is my sad attempt at doing something in iambic pentameter, though I think I didn't quite get it right. Please don't hold back criticisms I would love to hear what you all think!



over 5 years ago Sarah Simpson said:

The feeling in this one is strong.

The imagery is very supple and the scenes are lush in my mind. Oh, you! Pulled me in from the first wonderful words!

Too many humans

over 5 years ago neverandmind said:

Fantastic job. I really liked this. You did such a lovely job on the imagery.

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over 5 years ago Ally Black said:

This was great! Nice job! I really liked it.


over 5 years ago proof said:

I loved how much passion was put into this, and I really loved your word choice! Great job!



over 5 years ago Karyn Jade Leigh said:

I loved this! Great job!

The imagery was fantastic, but sometimes I felt like I was on sensory overload- too much too fast. But that's just me, I'm a wacko, lol.

So good luck in the contest (the one you reviewed for me will be entered, too... maybe). ☺

I really wish I could say more, but there really isn't anything else to critique. Well done!


over 5 years ago Alyssa said:

I absolutely love this piece. The imagery is fantastic and you wove the story in such a beautiful way. You put a ton a work into this and I can tell you that it totally paid off. This is an incredible accomplishment and I respect you for it. Absolutely nothing negative to say. You're a very, very talented writer. Keep it up! :)