The Inventor

The Inventor

1 chapter / 1525 words

Approximately 8 minutes to read

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This is an excerpt from a steampunk story I have been working on. Gregory Parr is an eccentric young inventor that has recently risen to prominence for his mechanical insects. Invited to afternoon tea by a well-to-do lady, he sticks out among the guests with more decorum.

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about 4 years ago Rutelidae said:

We think your story is lovely, but you have not asked for, nor been granted permission to use Insect Lab imagery, please contact us immediately through: www.insectlabstudio.com

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about 4 years ago Nix Blair said:

I loved this! The banter and dialogue was natural and flowed; the characters were strong and realistic; the descriptions were vivid; your grammar was mostly excellent; and the plot, though nothing huge, was still captivating. I was hooked from the moment you mentioned Matt Smith (considering I'm a fan of Doctor Who! XD ). Great, GREAT write! I honestly don't know what else to say.

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about 4 years ago Trina Elisabeth said:

This is awesome. I love the idea of those inventions... I would kill to have something like that, especially one that can fly. Your writing style made the whole story very believable, and I love how Gregory was so incredibly bored. You showed it quite well just from what he was doing. And him as Matt Smith, well. Seems perfect, too. xD Great job with this, and keep writing! :)

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about 4 years ago Yowlot said:

Awesome and interesting excerpt, sounds like the beginnings of a great story. There were a couple of mistakes I saw though (I think you put ran instead of read) but other then that I really enjoyed this! :)

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5 months ago Sangeeth said:

Whoops ! .... i accidentlly clicked on oost before i could finish .. sorry !

So like I was saying.... really loved the first line And you might wanna look on this line :-

"On the Alchemy, Magicians, and Clockwork by Francis Beck, ran one.

Steam: One Modern Man’s Mechanical Journey by Louis Benzie, said another.

There was a whole shelf of them, and they were all in leather, gilded collector’s edition jackets"

Why not remove 'ran one' and 'said another' from it and make it like

"On the Alchemy, Magicians,Clockwork by Francis Beck,Steam: One Modern Man’s Mechanical Journey by Louis Benzie.

There was a whole shelf of them, and they were all in leather, gilded collector’s edition jackets"

Just saying ...

Anyway ... It was pretty cool ... Keep on

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5 months ago Sangeeth said:

First of all ... Its was amazing ... Normally I dont read much ... so yours might be the 3rd or 4th one that I actually finished once I have started ...

really loved the first line

'The tea-stained invitation flapped in the breeze as Gregory Parr knocked on the door'. On the Alchemy, Magicians, and Clockwork by Francis Beck, ran one.

Steam: One Modern Man’s Mechanical Journey by Louis Benzie, said another.

There was a whole shelf of them, and they were all in leather, gilded collector’s edition jackets.