Hi- I was just working on the story you commented on 2 months ago and decided to look at your story. This is really interesting and well written, and I feel bad for the twins. Please continue!
This was such an original topic! I would love to read more if you continue. You have several typos here and there that should be cleared up with a quick read-through. Also, "everything went black" is a little cliche and you could probably find some better words for this. Otherwise, the voice and style of the MC is really interesting and realistic.
You've got something going here, that's for sure! I've never read anything about Siamese twins before, so that's pretty original. Just a few things though:
grammar and misspellings.
You gave me the impression that they somehow hide Lea? Or maybe when they go to school, you should have at least one person be mean to them. It's just more realistic. Sadly, there's always a mean girl.
Comments(29)
4 months ago Aria said:
Wow this is amazing! I hope you continue writing. This is extremely interesting and I want to know more! Your writing style is just brilliant.
7 months ago Hannah Ellery-Ashby said:
Hi- I was just working on the story you commented on 2 months ago and decided to look at your story. This is really interesting and well written, and I feel bad for the twins. Please continue!
8 months ago Alex Dresdner said:
This was such an original topic! I would love to read more if you continue. You have several typos here and there that should be cleared up with a quick read-through. Also, "everything went black" is a little cliche and you could probably find some better words for this. Otherwise, the voice and style of the MC is really interesting and realistic.
8 months ago Maia Sowers said:
So cute!!! I loved it!! Very unique and creative! Great job! Keep writing!
Reviews(4)
9 months ago Riley Wagner said:
Aww this was cute, I love the gay couple in the 4th chapter (: You do have some spelling errors, however but they are an easy fix.
Example:
"Its Emma's birthday tomorrow.." Its should be It's. "...ihospital" I'm not sure if this was meant to say that, but it should be hospital.
Besides those, I freaking loved the story. It was amazing, keep this up definitely!
9 months ago Tayler W said:
You've got something going here, that's for sure! I've never read anything about Siamese twins before, so that's pretty original. Just a few things though:
grammar and misspellings.
You gave me the impression that they somehow hide Lea? Or maybe when they go to school, you should have at least one person be mean to them. It's just more realistic. Sadly, there's always a mean girl.
But it's a good start!