Smile Mommy

Smile Mommy

1 chapter / 816 words

Approximately 4 minutes to read

Description:

Daughter who has a mom with depression.

Genres:

Short Story

Comments(21)

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over 4 years ago CharChar said:

I really like this! Great job.

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over 4 years ago J.A.D. Lumanta said:

Hi, GL. I was going to click on one of the stories you recommended, but the cover for this story just melted my heart, and I'M SO GLAD I READ THIS STORY! It was so sweet and painfully sad, but a really good story nonetheless. I almost cried... :-( It was SO GOOD! Loved it! :))))))

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almost 5 years ago Molly McIlvar said:

This was lovely. I'm still going to read "Promised" for our swap, but this caught my eye. Love the innocence and honesty of the main character, and the fact that- realistically- the comfort of her daughter would not be enough to cheer her up all the time. Good work!

Tony

almost 5 years ago Anthony Miller said:

This was just beautiful :")

Reviews(2)

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almost 5 years ago Bookaholic said:

Sorry for doing this swap so late, I had a hectic week. I really liked this piece, it brought forth a subject that i haven't read very often. There were a few problems. There was some grammatical errors and awkward sentencing that hindered the flow of the story. also there was a lot of telling not showing (don't know if that was what you were going for). Also as a suggestion, i think you should add more description to this story so that the reader can understand the setting of the story. Otherwise i really liked this. Great Job.

Me 1963

almost 5 years ago Linda D said:

The MC voice in this is very good. Innocent – a little naïve… and hopeful.

There really isn’t much I could say to improve this, but your review side seemed rather void and comment side seemed to be domineering – thought I balance that for you…you’re welcome.