I've Got Your Back

I've Got Your Back

10 chapters / 16304 words

Approximately about 1 hour to read

Description:

*Not Finished*
Jaden Clark is a 17 year old boy whose life has been ruined by his horrible ex-girlfriend, Sarah Watson, who goes to his high school. After he broke up with her, she started a rumor about him in order to get revenge and she tries to turn every person against him. But when a new girl, Chloe Rose Sullivan, someone who feels lost and alone in such a strange school, stands up for him, he sees a brigher side of school and also finds an opportunity to find someone who will believe that he is not the person his ex made him out to be. Together, the two struggle through junior year, striving to stay uncorrupted and unlike everyone else. In doing so, Jaden solemnly promises Chloe that he will always have her back no matter what and says that he will never let anyone harm her because she differs from everyone else; and she's given him a chance to prove that he is who he says he really is, despite what others think of him. In the end, they find a way to conquer his exgirlfriend and extinguish the rumor in hopes of everything returning to normal for him.

Genres:

Drama, Romance, Novel

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almost 5 years ago c said:

Hearted! If you would like to swap please read/heart my story “Ella and Sam were here.” Thanks!

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almost 5 years ago JJ H said:

Really good! Keep adding more puleeze!

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almost 5 years ago Nicky Lang said:

I read some of it, and it is really good. I'll need to come back and read more later. You did a good job on it. I liked the idea behind the story. Terrific job!

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almost 5 years ago Si Jia said:

Chapter 1 only

I love it so much! I really enjoyed the plot and it was pretty creative. I didn't see many grammatical issues. Nice tone, style, and diction. Great job and keep it up!

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about 5 years ago Roogle said:

REVIEW REQUESTED BY S.J BOUQUET

You're story started off great. Then it went down hill. I found myself really losing interest as I kept reading. By the end of chapter one, I felt like I was ready the work of kid in elementary school. Too many "First, then, second, last, etc." and "I did this, I was sad, blah blah". In other words, you do more telling than showing. Which is really bad.

You overused the word "deserted" WAY too much. And after the third time, I found it irritating. The Thesarus is your best friend. Never forget that.

The second chapter didn't hook me in either. It was too "main characters goes through morning routine for their first day at a new school." It's too cliche.

Overall, I have no idea where you're going with the story. I recommend some sentence revision to give it a more "mature" feel. But you have potential. It just needs to be polished darling. :)

Happy Writing!

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about 5 years ago Wenzday said:

I liked the premise, but I have a few suggestions. Go back through and make sure you don't have the same word twice in a sentence. That happened in the first sentence, and while I kept reading, it wasn't a great welcome to your story. Sometimes, even if the word is in the next sentence, it's worth it to take our a thesaurus and replace the word if it happens to be the main part of the sentence. Next, you switched your tenses around a little, so try to keep those straight. Other then that, think you have a good idea here and I'd love to see you clean it up a bit, rework it, and have a great finished product like I see this can be!