Waiting

Waiting

1 chapter / 83 words

Approximately half a minute to read

Description:

Another poem

Genres:

Writing, Romance, Poetry

Comments(4)

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over 4 years ago Daniella Serra said:

I really like the way it started out. The ending was nice too!!

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over 4 years ago Daniella Serra said:

I really like the way it started out. The ending was nice too!!

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about 5 years ago Corrie Hobbs said:

I feel like there should have been something more to this poem. Like at the end there should be something like, "Waiting/for that feeling/but it never came" or idk... It just felt like this was left somewhat unfinished. I was also confused because the author is waiting but it also said that with every step they get closer. Then later it mentions running away. I wasn't sure why that was there since the two people were supposed to be getting closer. Those things just threw me off for a moment, I don't understand why they're there. Overall, decent work. I think it could use a little help but it was still pretty good.

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about 5 years ago Bijan Moore said:

Wow! Great job! All the line breaks were spot on.

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about 5 years ago Vgirl said:

I think maybe some of the phrases at the end may need a little bit or work, but not much. Other than that, thumbs up!