The Visitor

The Visitor

9 chapters / 14613 words

Approximately about 1 hour to read


***UNFINISHED*** One night, Kevin is visited by a strange girl who seems to come from somewhere he cannot imagine. She says she's on a mission, but for some reason, with every question Kevin asks, another eight pile up. Who, or what, is this mysterious visitor? What is her "mission"? And why does Kevin have to play a part in it?



almost 5 years ago lpy67 said:

Thanks for commenting on one of my scripts! Sorry I didn't responded sooner, I don't come on here much. I like this script and think you are a very good writer! This script had good character development; I felt like the characters were real. I am not too fond of how you put your screenplay in acts. This script is formatted like a theatrical script. Traditional screenplays are split into three acts: the exposition/rising action, the climax, and the denouement. I recommend you buy Screenwriting in a Nutshell by Paul Freidman. This book is spectacular and teaches/gives you tips on how to format screenplays and screenplay plot development. Overall, I enjoyed your script. I have taken filmmaking classes at the University of Southern California and Stanford. If you write any more scripts I would love to (maybe) produce them!

-Remington Long

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about 5 years ago ♠ Jonah ♠ said:

Wow, this is amusing. You should check out this group I made recently, just for playwrights and screenplay writers. It's called Celtx something, I forget at the moment because I'm tired, but it should be easy to find on my page.


about 5 years ago Dreamerofbooks said:

This is very thrilling. It kept me captivated with a hint of mystery. You are very talented. Who knows? I might see a movie based off one of your screen play. :)


about 5 years ago Natalie Berger said:

i still have more hearts than you on my other script...soooo I've decided to grant you the charity of a heart. ^_^ not a bad start. well written. good pacing. The last little thing with laura seems a bit familiar though, coppycat ;) I think this shall be our next project, okay? okay.



about 5 years ago V.ROSE said:

Hey Dorsey, so sorry its taken me long to respond. I have been so busy with homework and just so much work. So, I will start by saying that Act 7 was just breathless, I liked that Laura was freaken out about Kevin finding out that she and Hunter kissed. It was funny in my opinion. I like seeing her act weird about him. I don't know why but I really like hunter. He's starting to grow on me. I mean I love Kevin also, but I don't know. Anyways act 7 was awesome. I will get to reading the next act soon. I have lots of homework to finish on.


about 5 years ago V.ROSE said:

Act 6, whoa, it was freaken goood. I love The whole Serena being an ex-hunter . Man, Kevin , I must admit, he's changed a lot from the beginning, I mean he's kind of the same, but as he learns more things from serena, he finally gets out of the his dumb self I would say and starts understanding more things. Gosh, I gotta say, you left me with another damn cliff hanger. Also, I loved the dialogue a lot, you are gifted to write dialogue, not many people can my friend. I mean your dialogue flows well and its really fun to read. I absolutley love your style of writing, it keps me intruiged. I cannot wait to see what happens next. I am soo left with questions. Like if serena said when a hunter appears she needs to be there, why is that the hunter apeared with out serena being there.hmm it makes me wonder. Also with the Dane situatuion. Okay, so I admit, plays at times I have hard time undertanding, but yours I pretty much do =), you make it clear. I really do love "The Visitor" a lot. PLEASE UPDATE ME WHEN ACT 7 IS UP.=) I so LOVE KEVIN!