Seven Minutes

Seven Minutes

1 chapter / 1180 words

Approximately 6 minutes to read

Description:

In the world of Locklust there stands a clock tower, the Timekeeper. This particular clock tower is true to it's name, it keeps time. Literally, time will stop when the clock does. Join Calie as she relives her last moments saving a world that will never discover the names of their heroes, the rebels.

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about 5 years ago femme anonyme said:

Such a unique concept! I love the world you created. Apart from a few small mistakes in spelling, grammar, sentence structure, blah blah blah, this was pristine! Really good work! I hope you win :)

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about 5 years ago Nove Payne said:

I really liked this. It was unique in both the setting and the narration, like the story is what she sees as she's dying. It gave the story a sense of urgency that let you fit everything in within the word limit, while not making it feel rushed. Great work, and good luck in the contest!

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about 5 years ago Zea Pturin said:

I really like this, your idea is very interesting!

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about 5 years ago Tori Bowers said:

Honestly I read the first two and half paragraphs and skimmed the rest. It sounds interesting but it's kinda confusing. This is hard to do in a lot of storys, especially when your only allowed so many words. I like the idea of the sectors though. Good luck and God bless!

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about 5 years ago AleishaCleopatra said:

Aww, I like this is. It's a great idea, and it's different from what I've read. It is similar to the Hunger Games in the sense that people from different sectors have specific occupations or whatever, but that's the only similarity I saw. Anyway this is really good. I usually get on people for not showing as much as they should, but the way you wrote this felt right. Maybe because the MC was talking to us, telling us what happened in those last seven minutes. It felt that way, too, like someone was just telling us of an event. You did that well. There were some errors: missing commas and run-on sentences. But it didn't subtract from the story.