Alleged Alibi

Alleged Alibi

1 chapter / 704 words

Approximately 4 minutes to read

Description:

For the Who Done it contest!
Will my alibi hold up?
Please, no "free" hearts!! I want honesty only.
*And guys, I'm not changing the caps lock. I'm not trying to be professional in ANY WAY. I'm trying to be funny.*

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almost 5 years ago Elaine Harlington said:

Haha. That was funny, especially the end. I do agree with the person below me. Try to avoid all-caps because sometimes it hurts rather than helps. That's all. :)

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almost 5 years ago WintersGirl said:

It was funny, I got a good laugh. But putting lots of words in caps is a throw-off. Try italicizing instead of caps lock. Also, try to avoid double punctuation, such as "??"

The "pickle" thing was a little overexaggerated, but it was still a clever idea. A great alibi, all in all, since it had good humor :)

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almost 5 years ago Amman said:

The ending=perfect.

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almost 5 years ago M.H. said:

"I HAVEN'T BEEN PUBLISHED YET!" XD XD Those have the making of very famous last words. XD The idea of multiple pickle factories amused me to no end. I can't understand what would possess a town to have more than one pickle factory either. Excellent work with the voice of your character and best of luck in the contest! ^^

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almost 5 years ago ArtemisFey said:

I have to second everything Ashley said about the caps lock key. It's literally the bane of my existence. If you need to show shouting, either do it in narration (in a second- or third-person narrative) or use italics. Exclamation points also get the point across well. But WRITING LIKE THIS TO SHOW YOU'RE YELLING looks cheap, like you don't know what you're doing or how this "computer" thing works. It's not professional.

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almost 5 years ago Ashley McGee said:

Oh, and on the single quotes thing. If you are quoting something someone else said, it has to be double quotation marks, then you close them within the other dialogue. Since you don't have any other quotation marks, this shouldn't be confusing. Again, I could be wrong about your intentions. *Thumbs up* 'Kay bye.