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A scripted revolution


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about 5 years ago Kat Lefay said:

Honestly? The idea for this? Fascinating. The story has the typical elements of a society controling how people live and think. But it also has unique twists like how life is controlled, the universal denial, and the surprise ending. Defintely didn't see that coming. My advice would be to intersperse the story with more description and action. The first half is just explanation and the second half is just dialouge. You can drag the explanation out so it isn't reavealed all at once. This will also help create suspense. And the dialouge should alternate with some action or description. All in all, good job. The plot is very original which should help you in the contest. Good luck! :)