Dragon's Race

Dragon's Race

14 chapters / 15701 words

Approximately about 1 hour to read

Description:

In the land of Ginova, a girl named Athene, who is a proeliator draco or dragon warrior, prepares for a race that determines the next Dominus Draco or Dragon Master. Little does she know that an ancient evil rises up to turn her world upside down. Forced to retreat, she goes in search of allies and information about this new threat. With the help of her old and new friends, she embarks on a journey that may help protect the world but will discover new challenges that may put her life, and even her heart, at risk.

Genres:

Drama, Fantasy, Novel

Comments(11)

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about 4 years ago M.H. said:

I've read the first chapter and prologue, and this seems pretty interesting so far. The idea of a race to determine the next Dragon Master is intriguing. I do wish your characters felt more developed, though. There were also some issues with missing commas and a spelling error or two that bothered me. I recommend that you run this through some word processor with spell check and such.

Good luck working on this!

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about 4 years ago Krystal Fragoso said:

I love your descriptions! The concept is very original and I adored that! I've read dragon stories, but never one like this. The prologue really caught my attention, which is what it's supposed to do. Great job!

Think

about 4 years ago Amaryliss White said:

I love the prologue. It really captures your attention. Your writing is good and leaves just enough questions to keep us reading. Great job!

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about 4 years ago ~Mina~ said:

I also read the prologue and first chapter, it was really good too! Very descriptive with the emotions and what's going on and the story board was really interesting :)

Reviews(3)

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about 4 years ago Sami said:

Reviewing as I'm reading... also I'm not so good with grammar mistakes so I'll most likely not point out any.

Wow what a prologue! It's supposed to be the beginning but it sounds like the end to me haha... bad joke I know. Moving on now. The part where it was like "The pain... the pain..." I ended up quoting author John Green here: "... it rains in my soul." Aside from the unnecessary humor on my part, so far this is pretty darn dramatic.

Hmm what is this inner voice... I like how Chapter One reflects on some stuff from the Prologue if that makes sense. With Gia hollering out her name like that. Interesting. Love the main character's sense of humor.

Ooo Seth ;) I'm getting the Percy Jackson vibe here, like the mood you've set. It's quite different than the dramatic prologue... oh snap a fight is arising! Oh wait Seth came in the way :P Oh her father... so sad.

Ughh I want to know what happens during the dragon race but I have homework -_-

Overall, good work! I think the idea is original, and I didn't have a problem with it. The characters are likable and the amount of detail for me, was adequate. Hey, I may be biased, just saying. This sounds more like a quick fun read, which isn't necessarily a bad thing. Be careful of tone/mood shifts. It can puzzle people if too quick. Hopefully, you've built your characters enough in the future chapters :)

Ed

over 4 years ago Edward Hoefer said:

Cute story, nice pacing. I like how well you have everything organized, and you've figured out a good way to make the story come alive. I'm hungry for more.