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© 2013 [Cover by Cyder] There's no more water.
almost 4 years ago janessa said:
That was amazing.
1 thing that bugged me was that you said "I really do" 3 times.
Thank you for posting this onto Figment. Soo glad I got a chance to read it. Never stop writing
almost 4 years ago Katie ZaBAM said:
THAT WAS SHEER BRILLIANCE. SLDKJFLSKDJLKASLDKFJASLD
...Sorry for the all caps, I had to get it out of my system. This was really marvelously grafted from beginning to end. I also love that there was a valuable lesson to be learned, even if it was through the hard way. Fantastic job!!
almost 4 years ago Madi DiMercurio said:
OMG! I loved it! the connection between Anderson and her as brother and sister are strong. definitely the parts where she acts as the big sister in charge and then at the end when she crys over him because he didn't make it.
I loved the whole thing. and i loved how you ended it
great job! :)
almost 4 years ago Karyn Jade Leigh said:
Oh my gosh. This knocked me off my feet. I loved it!!! Sooo much! My heart broke at the ending! Oh my gosh. Wow. You are a fantastic writer. Never stop. Ever. ♥
over 4 years ago Keru Faye said:
Swap for Grave or Child: A Recipe
Congratulations on being a finalist! I read as I review.
-"Once-majestic rivers had dried out"
-"three tiny bullets"
-"These men don't realize what they're wasting"
-A question I have at this point: Aren't the government people just as thirsty as they are? It doesn't sound like they have more power than average people if most of them are dead. Still, I understand why the brothers are upset.
-"bound tightly to my stomach"
-Ooh,a twist! Me gusta.
Overall: Really well-written, well-thought out story. I felt the characters' desperation. Her realization at the end was really powerful and sad. This truly deserves its spot as a finalist. Good luck with the rest of contest!
over 4 years ago Isla May Miens said:
Swap for "Love, Dad" and/or "Witch Hunt"
Very poignant. I'm a huge fan of dystopian stories, and I think this one hit the mark. It was really descriptive, and you effectively conveyed the scenario without being too verbose. I like the way you describe the relationship between the narrator and Anderson.