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*Work in progress* Please comment/review! Heart/react accordingly please. :) It's not finished yet and the latest section may have spelling/grammar errors just bear with me until I get to fixing it xD
over 4 years ago Lorelle Shorten said:
I enjoyed this. Just a few grammer/spelling issues in parts. I really like the cover. I think the story is really good. Great job :)
over 4 years ago Kaiti G said:
Great work! Just go over some polishing and it's so good. You have a good plot, and your writing is great:) Keep it up! If you have some free time, think you'd mind returning the favor and reading my short story "Maiden of the Moon" and leave some feedback for me? Thanks so much, and keep writing!:)
over 4 years ago Merce said:
This was really good, quite a few grammar mistakes but otherwise I really liked it.
over 4 years ago Kira Martin said:
I like this so far, interesting idea. But I'd think about copy and pasting it into a word doc, that will catch more the errors. Keep writing!
over 4 years ago Kadalia Patton said:
I noticed in the first chapter after the nurse asked if he was alright, he responded “um… yeah.” That needs to be capitalized and afterwords 'a icepack' a should be turned into an if it comes before a word that starts with a vowel. I love the story so far and I can't wait to read more!