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Completed short story.
over 1 year ago Nganga Naima said:
Nice story! But I would suggest showing more than telling. Otherwise, good job :)
over 1 year ago Cat Seaver said:
I feel bad for the MC i agree that it didn't really connect to the reader well, but not bad(:
over 1 year ago LaLaLove507 said:
I did feel quite bad for her and her predicament, but I feel like it didn't really connect well with the reader. I wish there was more to go on, really.
over 1 year ago Kristen said:
I feel bad for the M.C. It's sad...
over 1 year ago Sophia Davis said:
It was sad and interesting! But you had some grammatical errors and it just didn't flow right in some areas. Try reading it aloud and you might be able to work out most of the errors. I wish you the best of luck in your writing!