A Day To Remember

A Day To Remember

2 chapters / 1172 words

Approximately 6 minutes to read

Description:

Setting is in the future after the apocalypse of the world. The book begins in July 6, 2102

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almost 5 years ago Theresa Rose said:

Whoa!! I loved this a lot!!! Great work!

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almost 5 years ago Rona said:

Wow...this is really interesting! I like your tone. There were a couple of places where you could’ve reworked the sentence structure to make it flow better, but besides that this was great!

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almost 5 years ago Kyra Simpson said:

Wow..this was AMAZING.

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almost 5 years ago Priscilla Michaels said:

Thanks for the feed back guys. I'll be honest, I felt like there was something wrong about it. I will fix it! Thank You! :)

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almost 5 years ago Bookaholic said:

This was a nice start to a story. There were some grammatical errors and tense changes that hindered the flow of the piece. Also it seemed like you were telling the reader rather than showing them that was happening (i know its comprised of diary entries but still you need to add more detail so the reader can see whats going on and be able to feel like they are right there in the scene. Furthermore i was really confused at parts in your story. Why would they have a school that preps them for disasters if science had fixed all natural disasters? also why would their be bunkers if said disasters didn't happen anymore? and how would she know where to go when she got there? I think that you need to go back and link your details together better. Its a nice premise but there are a lot of inconsistencies that need to be fix. Great Job.