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Approximately about 1 hour to read
(A new take on the common fairy tale the Twelve Dancing Princesses)
(Under construction, being almost completely rewritten. if you read it now it will make 0 sense)
almost 3 years ago Warrior Cat said:
Wow! This is a pretty book, yet, it needs more details. What did the girls look like exactly? Some simple details will make it better.
about 3 years ago Lily Chen said:
I read the first chapter and it was pretty interesting. The names did seem eerily familiar with another retelling of the 12 dancing princesses but I'm not sure if that intentional or not. Other than that, it was a nice read and had a lot of details. Happy writing!
about 3 years ago ElliethePandaQueen said:
hey so I was wondering if you haven't read a book called Princesses of the Midnight Ball? If not, then your story is definitely clever AND original. If you have(and I'm not judging, I do this too on accident) you may be writing pretty much the same story as Midnight Ball and not even realize that that's where you got the idea from. Maybe just check yourself against her story. If you have other ideas and your's will be a different take, then I suggest changing the names of the characters and a few other things. :) Take my advice or don't. -Ellie
over 3 years ago Marae Keenly said:
I love how it starts out as this idyllic kingdom fairy tale, something that could be told as a bedtime story, but it turns into something much more complex, with interesting characters. I'm only on chapter 5 now, but I will keep reading!
over 3 years ago Kayla Thaler said:
I read the first chapter and I have to say this is very good, but there wasn't a hook in the beginning to keep me wanting to read. Also, I was confused on all the character and who was speaking when. Maybe, have a couple speak and introduce the rest by them doing something. You don't have to introduce a character by making them speak. I did like the concept though. Good job.