Play the Fool

Play the Fool

1 chapter / 559 words

Approximately 3 minutes to read

Description:

You wonder if it is right to bear all, but you cannot undo it once it has been done...

Genres:

Writing, Short Story

Comments(8)

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over 4 years ago Maya StClair said:

HE KISSES HER AND THEN HE LEAVES HER?!?! That's all I have to say. Speaking of breaking hearts, you heart-breaking heart-breaker.

Most people think rain is romantic but I think it's the coldest, most depressing thing ever. This story just makes me so sad. SO sad.

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over 4 years ago M.H. said:

I love how powerful this was for something so short and simple. You started a good number of your sentences the same way, but I almost felt like it just served to drive the story along, like it intensified the rejection at the end. Your characters also seemed well developed, and, while I like happy endings, I feel that this stood out because it had a strong element of realism to it. Great work! :)

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over 4 years ago Elexys Larson said:

I really liked this story. I loved how the suspensed built all the way to the end and them it was like BAM! with the heartbreak. very nice job.

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over 4 years ago Emily Kathleen Stamm said:

Great story! It was so sad! I really like what you did with it. Good luck with all your writing!

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over 4 years ago Paige Johnson said:

Good atmosphere the hook provides. I like the tone of the narrator and how the urgency is presented. However, you cannot continue after dialogue w/o a "said" or something of the like in it. So the nodding and other such non-verbal gestures would be their own sentences. There's a decent amount of mystery and I'm glad it ended the way it did.