Freeway

Freeway

1 chapter / 500 words

Approximately 3 minutes to read

Description:

My submission for the Seventeen Mag contest as well as my first Figment story EVER!!! Please heart if you like it and comment with feedback!!!

Genres:

Writing, Short Story

Comments(18)

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over 4 years ago Patty Pimperstin said:

Hearted yours! If you want to swap, please check out "The Springtime Sacrifice" on my page & heart it if you like it! :)

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over 4 years ago c said:

Hearted! If you would like to swap please read/heart my story “Ella and Sam were here.” Thanks!

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over 4 years ago Maya said:

This was fantastic and very well written!! Great job and good luck!!!!

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over 4 years ago Precious said:

Great job and good luck.

Reviews(1)

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over 4 years ago Shelby Sullivan said:

Your story pulls at my heart strings! People grow apart sadly it can happen in your own family. I like how the story portrays the real hurt of an older sister. How she felt that she was too self-centered and now because of that she left her sister to fend for her self. Starting at this stage shows real promise for the main character as well. It is the perfect story of changing and the possibility to grow and to learn. The story was well built as well. In the middle of a crisis all we know is that she is speeding down the highway running through the scenario in her mind. The main character takes the reader to the past and shows how she has been a neglectful sister. So in the end the reader also feels that the main character does have some responsibility for the fact that her sister is in the hospital. Very well written. I enjoyed it very much. Thanks for letting me read it! -Shelb's