Escelle

Escelle

2 chapters / 1806 words

Approximately 9 minutes to read

Genres:

Action, Drama, Suspense

Comments(9)

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almost 5 years ago Melissa Rose Thompson said:

Wow. This is really good. I like your writing style and your opening paragraph really pulled me in. Such a great story you have here. Will definitely be following you as soon as I post this comment.

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almost 5 years ago Megan said:

Great job. Intense. Kept me interested. :) You may read any of mine :) Thanks.

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almost 5 years ago Megan said:

Great job. Intense. Kept me interested. :) You may read any of mine :) Thanks.

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almost 5 years ago S. Morales said:

This kinda struck me as very similar to THG but I really liked it. I think you should have used names more different that Sona and Nova because that was a bit confusing, I couldn't really distinguish who was who. Also I think you should add more, it has a lot of potential. Good job c:

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almost 5 years ago Lila said:

Wow that was really emotional! And powerful. Good Job!

A few things though: watch your tenses, you tend to mostly be in the past tense but there are moments when you flicker into the present tense, so be careful about that.

also, could you elucinate on "they" a little more? i was really confused about who "they" were, but that's your creative decision and I don't want to hinder that.

Other than that, really good work! I can't wait to read more of your stuff!!!

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almost 5 years ago Anonymous Writer said:

This is really good! I found one error,though.

...Count me out(,) though." she trudged...

And it's constructive criticism, too!

~Sarah