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if I win the seventeen.com contest, I will DONATE the ENTIRE prize to animals foundations/ stopping animal testings. That is a promise. please support me!!!
4 months ago Emily Curtis said:
Isn't it sad that humans do this to animals? Very beautifully written, I can tell that there was a lot of heart put into it. :-)
7 months ago Eve Harrison said:
Wow, this is incredible! Those poor animals!!!!! I'm a total animal rights person, and I love this soooo much! Keep writing, this is great!
12 months ago Rachel D. said:
I stumbled upon this, and I'm very glad I did. Nicely done, you are a brilliant writer!!!!
about 1 year ago Lightningfur said:
Very well written. You are a very good writer! :)
8 months ago Violet Tomilson said:
I loved this! Animal rights is a huge issue, and you handled it very well. The writing kept me gripped, and the ending was great. One thing: after the "one hour earlier", maybe you should include an ellipses. (you know, ...) But other than that, great. Keep writing!
8 months ago Mai Ashina said:
I really enjoy the idea behind this story, however I do agree with the person below me that it does seem as if you speed things up too much. I actually like the anonymous effect of not knowing the character's name, as many stories begin with the name and description of a character.
The plot is different and the subject matter is very touchy for many people so I think that you will find a very fiery audience with this. You build suspense very well and also the flashback from the very beginning didn't feel awkward or misplaced like many others that I have read.
All in all a very good start.
Happy writing and please continue,