A Thirst for Blood

A Thirst for Blood

1 chapter / 248 words

Approximately 1 minute to read

Description:

At a carnival anything mythical can happen.

(With just a glare from a vampire, you will be transformed into one yourself and will develop a vampire symbol tattoo on your arm)

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almost 5 years ago Jennifer said:

completely grabbed my attention and kept it. I really like this story line.

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almost 5 years ago Catherine C said:

This was really intriguing, however I feel like there's more to the story. How much about vampires are known to the general population, or was the MC one of the few who did? What are vampires like in the 'verse? Why did he turn a young boy and a random teenager? I feel like this could be expanded on, but the roots of a great story are clearly there, as well as a demonstration of good writing skills.

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almost 5 years ago Jimmy Colaton said:

This has the potential to be amazing. It is kind of creepy and very well written, but its pace was too quick, you could easily have made that piece twice as long without adding anything to the storyline.

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almost 5 years ago Twilight8890 said:

I feel like this could be longer and there could be a bit more explanation. For example, the gender of the MC is never identified. I'm thinking it's a girl but I'm not sure. I enjoyed the concept however

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almost 5 years ago ♪Erika♫ said:

Now, I'm not a huge fan of vampire stories, but this beginning really got me interested. I hope you will turn this into a nice long novel. Great job. :)

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almost 5 years ago Julia World~Weaver said:

I read the story and here's what I thought. I figure your MC was a girl, but it wasn't specified. I liked it. I feel like it is like the prologue to a longer story or the beginning of the description. I think it could be more! Good job! I liked it!