Beyond Here Lies Monsters

Beyond Here Lies Monsters

1 chapter / 492 words

Approximately 2 minutes to read

Description:

A man that transcends humanity while losing everything that made him human.

Comments(11)

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almost 5 years ago Patty Pimperstin said:

Hearted yours! If you want to swap, please check out "The Springtime Sacrifice" on my page & heart it if you like it! :)

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almost 5 years ago Juliana Arreola said:

I really liked it, it peaked my curiosity, but I think it should be longer because it was a bit confusing especially at the "Somewhen" part

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almost 5 years ago Skye said:

I hearted it out of interest. It was a little confusing, you may wanna clear that up.

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almost 5 years ago AndreaTheWolfie said:

somewhat confusing, but once I maybe kinda sorta figured it out, I found it very interesting. I think. Oh well. Overall, good job, and best of luck in the contest!

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almost 5 years ago Briana Colfer said:

It could be a better story in my opinion if you used simpler verbs and words for easier reading. The beginning paragraph for instance. And I was a little confused at what was going on. Unfortunately in a word limit story you have to squeeze your plot in and choose your words carefully, and often cut out things that aren't vitally necessary. You have a good beginning, but I would add more plot details in and develop it a bit more. You said to be honest, so I hope this helps. Keep it up!