Bloom Again

Bloom Again

2 chapters / 1472 words

Approximately 7 minutes to read

Description:

(THIS IS IN PROGRESS, NOT YET FINISHED)

Is it possible to love someone when you know they can never be yours?

He’s talented, famous and handsome. Millions of countries toured, countless albums sold. He’s on the covers of magazines and his face on Times Square. He’s got millions of girls at his feet and a gorgeous TV star on his arm, but does Drew Harris really have it all?

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She’s a sixteen year old dance phenom with a tough attitude and skin made out of steel, but deep down, she has a broken heart from the boy she loved since childhood. Since his rise to golden fame, she never saw him again.

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When fate brings Isobel and Drew together by chance, something sparks within them. Will they be able to ignite their secret love , or will fame keep them apart?

Comments(7)

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almost 5 years ago Heidi L. said:

I actually really, really liked this. I didn't spot any grammar mistakes or anything, and I am intrigued to know more about Drew and Isobel. I want to know more!

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almost 5 years ago Mackenzie Kelley said:

You should add more soon! I really like this story. It is awesome. I didn't notice any mistakes and surprisingly I have no suggestions, I just absolutely love. Your MC is relatable and real to me. Easy to connect with and sympathize with too. Awesome!

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almost 5 years ago Cait Cher said:

I can definitely relate to this. My best friends are famous or part of a famous family, so I could feel the pain from this story.

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almost 5 years ago M.H. said:

Great work so far. I love how you've started, as well as the way you've shown what your character seems to think of Drew. Somehow, I feel like she could easily become just as famous, and that she's maybe just a tiny bit scared of the idea, if subconsciously. Great so far! I did see a spot that had to have been a typo ("[my] daughter") in the second chapter, but other than that, I feel like this was brilliant, and look forward to seeing more. :)

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almost 5 years ago Oni said:

The story so far ('til ch2) looks a little cliche for me. But I will wait for the next chapters and see what will happen, because . . . who knows? Anyway, this is still a good read. I like your writing voice, fresh and really cute. The flow was also good; you made it feel like a normal day, everything is casual, carefree, and it goes well with the genre. Your style of narration makes it perfect to be read aloud, or to be a voice over in a movie or something like that. I didn't spot any grammar errors. Spelling errors, yes, but very minor. I just hope this won't turn out to be entirely cliche. And I think it'd be good if you gave more dimension to your characters, like show what makes them unique, and explore their lives and backgrounds more. I'll be waiting for your next update!

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almost 5 years ago Carlos Ordaz said:

You have a solid leading hook but after that this feels flat almost generic even. I found isobel to be just whiny and bitter. and for drew I just felt nothing at all. Your opening gave me high hopes and then it just dropped the ball after that. There's too much backstory and it feels like hey let me tell you a story but before I tell this story I have to tell this back story. Find a way to intergate it better without ruining the pacing. The relationships didn't feel right they felt forced. Isobel and her mom was okay. Describe their emotions more. Don't be afraid to really hammer it in there. This a bare bones story don't be afraid to flesh it out. Add some meat to this so readers have something to really sink their teeth into. This feels like you're holding back. I hope you pick it in the upcoming chapters. Your grammar and spelling was rock solid. I hope I don't sound like a jackass but I'm extremely picky about what I like and I love romance and drama and I feel like you can do so mucg better and I hope you prove me right.