Kattia

Kattia

26 chapters / 14832 words

Approximately about 1 hour to read

Description:

*Warning I wrote this when I was like 11. This is absolute shit and I'm trying to somewhat finish it but that's probably not going to happen. If you're looking for an actual novel to read, check out The Line Between Love & Hate or A Turn of Events* It's about a girl called Kattia, and she's the sister of a kingdom's King. She's the best warrior in all 4 kingdoms, and I'm picturing her with light brown hair and green eyes that sometimes looks blue, and she's 17 yrs old. Please read it! © 2011 Emily W

Comments(17)

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about 5 years ago Aniace said:

hmm ok so you let me read the AMAZINGLY INTERESTING BOOK .... AN YOU LEAVE ME HANGING? PLEASE CONTINUE

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over 5 years ago Hermione said:

Oh my gosh! Please continue! I really like this and I hope that you would continue this anazing tale of Kattia! I want to know what's going to happen to Jev, Peter, Kattia, and Archia! I wonder what the prince is going to do to them! Please continue, but not to the point of break downs. --Madi

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over 5 years ago Jack Hobbs said:

This is a really great idea, but it needs some work. I feel like the main character is some all powerful being that can't really be stopped.

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almost 6 years ago Danielle Harmony said:

oh. my gosh. sooo good! Please please keep going.

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almost 5 years ago Shawnee Rose said:

This was an interesting story, but there were a lot of grammatical errors that need to be fixed. Especially in the prologue. Also, as the two before me have said, it needs a little umph. The beginning is just a little too dry. It needs something to capture the reader's attention and make them want to read more, to make it so that they can't put the story down.

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about 5 years ago Helena Christo said:

Hi, I felt that you needed a hook in or shortly after your first paragraph. Though it was interesting, I felt I had push myself a little to keep reading.

Descriptive first paragraphs are great as they set the scene for the novel. But you need a hook. Eg

Paragraph one: description of the 4 kingdoms. Paragraph two: your hook, becoming king. Paragraph three: elaborate on this, your description of the kingdoms etc.

If you'd like to read the first few paragraphs of 'The Forgotten Ones' you'll see how these devices work.

Best of luck!