Fire and Sky

Fire and Sky

1 chapter / 500 words

Approximately 3 minutes to read

Description:

A young girl is cast out of her village because she has chosen to love an enemy of her people.

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Note: I plan on making this into a full novel so if you like it be sure to let me know. The more chance it has at an audience the faster I'll get working on it. :) Enjoy!

Comments(7)

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over 4 years ago Rebecca Hill said:

This is a nice piece of work. It's well written with a few tiny grammatical glitches which are not that detrimental, they don't detract from the overall form and talent that you have. My only complaint is I'd like to see more, both characters expanded upon with a definite beginning, middle, and end. I view this short excerpt as a mere stretching of your writing muscle and this is a topic that would be well worth developing a bit further. Nice work.

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almost 5 years ago Kel said:

That was really good, I think it would make a great novel!

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almost 5 years ago J. L. Sterling said:

Hey great wordplay i loved it, and i hearted could you please read and rate my story WOLFGANG AND LET ME KNOW WHAT YOU THINK

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almost 5 years ago Alexa Marie said:

Wow! I really liked that!

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almost 5 years ago Alexa Marie said:

Definitely talented writing. You have a way with words that hooks the reader in. Love the topic as well. Great story!