The Clockwork Heart

The Clockwork Heart

1 chapter / 495 words

Approximately 2 minutes to read

Description:

*James Patterson Contest Finalist* David breaks the law and falls in love with his creation. Will their love be accepted?

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Comments(219)

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about 2 years ago Anorexic said:

Such a sad ending, but beautiful concept of truly loving ones creation. This was very well written and easy to follow along; good work

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about 3 years ago Bri Valdivia said:

I just had to come back and read this again (I used to be called Rhiannon Danae- I was in that Harry potter school group a while back....Hi!) I'm sure I commented on this a long time ago, but it's one of my favorite stories on figment ever. I read it a lot. It is truly beautiful. I'd love to read a longer version that expanded this world even more.

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about 3 years ago Chloy Maximus said:

Beautiful story. It hooked me right from the start and I loved how meaningful and heartbreaking it was for such a short story. Keep it up!

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over 3 years ago Megan Gillahan said:

There aren't words for this. It's eerie and mysterious and original and just utter perfection. I love this.

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over 1 year ago Nora June said:

Wonderful!

I love the depth that you have created in this story! You did so very well for using so few words!

It was done very well grammar wise too.

My one suggestion would be to add a little more detail about the main character's sister. She has a lot of potential and as few more sentences about her could really bring their relationship to life.

Keep writing!

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over 3 years ago Artemis J. Potter said:

Wow. I can see why you made it as a finalist in the contest: This was really, really good. It was short yet meaningful, and I loved your descriptions. The ending was really sad, too. I can't really think of any critique to give you, except that there may have been some grammatical errors but I'm not exactly sure. But the story is great. You did a fantastic job on it.